When I was in high school I got tired of being bullied and also tired of being treated like crap so I had a different attitude. This attitude lead me to telling my teacher "Fuck You". This had a lot of effects on me. Even if I explained this and what my means were for doing so I had no reason to do so.
When my friend and I were wrestling in the wrestling room he knocked the wind out of me. That's when my teacher Mrs. Green came in and started to poked me with her finger and started to say "That's what you get for messing around. That's what you get." The first bit of air I got back I bellowed out "Fuck You." The teacher stopped in disbelief. The first thing that happened to me was when she decided what to do with me by sending me to the principle's office.
When I got to the principles office he sat me down and asked what happened. I explained the whole story and didn't leave a thing out. When I was done explaining why I was sent to see him. He sat there for a minute and then said "well you know you were in the wrong and I have to suspend you for 2 weeks for using that language with your teacher." So he sent me to walk home.
When I got home I explained why I was home early to my mom. She lost her temper and said "your grounded till you go back to school go to your room." She said "the only thing you are able to do is go to your martial arts class, but after I tell your sensi what you did and he can decide what to do to you."
It was bad enough getting suspended and grounded. Now I have to wait for my sensi to pass judgement. He looked at me and wanted the truth and I told him everything that happened. He said "you will be doing bear crawls and also not participating in grappling which you enjoy." So the next couple of weeks I worked out and was put through hell to contemplate my actions. Until I go back to school I had to deal with all of these effects of what I did wrong.
When I think about my actions and what happened because of them. I realized that everything I do in life has repercussions either good or bad. It seams that my choice lead to bad repercussions. Made me realize also that I should not talk to anyone like that no matter how mad I get. No one deserves to be treated like that no matter what.
Everything here depends on one word: "poke." I don't know if she was figuratively poking you, just verbally hassling you, or if she was using her finger, foot, or old-lady cane to literally touch you.
ReplyDeleteIf she was just talking, then the reader sees the 'fuck you' one way, but if she was touching (i.e, assaulting a student), it plays out differently for the reader.
Why not make that crystal clear in a rewrite? Otherwise, it works fine.